If this is a review, it's a bit on the thin side.
I would make two suggestions.
1) post this in the reviews section. (you can contact the Admin after the fact and ask him kindly to move it)
2) maybe read a review or two on here to see what other users might constitute a helpful review and try out a few modifications.
Users tend to be a bit put-off with brand new members coming on a writing in the way that you have.
I would add, if this is a tout/pimp/WG, FUCK OFF you useless worthless cunt! But if it is genuinely Dave Smith, I apologise for my use of such profanity.